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Susan Sibley-Rodgers's avatar

Good point. But sometimes you can miss something that got cut and was needed to explain something later. Then it leaves a spot where it doesn’t make sense to the reader. Usually catch those though.

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Lewis Campfield's avatar

Great story. I'll be thinking about it for a while. I feel I am missing something. I'll have to read it again.

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Susan Sibley-Rodgers's avatar

Let me know. may need revision!

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Lewis Campfield's avatar

I like it. I would never be presumptuous enough to suggest revisions to your story. If you change it according to the desires or whims of others then it is not truly your story. It's good the way it is.

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Linda's avatar

Fantastic! I would LOVE to be able to write like you!!! Such great dialog, too!

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